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I have a question about the context of a paragraph in a story I'm writing by Tansin A. Darcos (TDARCOS) 02/23/2012, 10:56am PST
I'm writing a story about a guy with a mind control device, and he's going to use it on the widow of a recently deceased Senator and his daughter who were both killed in a violent incident. I want to see if the irony and/or satire in this paragraph work:
Someone once said that targeting recent widows for fucking was unsportsmanlike, they're so vulnerable that it's like using dynamite to catch fish or a cop killer setting up a sniper nest in a window of a tall building overlooking a donut shop. With the guy having his mind control device, some might have said it's as disgusting as a racially-motivated sociopathic murderer running ads mentioning free fried chicken and watermelon for Martin Luther King Jr.'s birthday, and giving the address of the local Ku Klux Klan as the location.
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I have a question about the context of a paragraph in a story I'm writing by Tansin A. Darcos (TDARCOS) 02/23/2012, 10:56am PST NEW
    You're getting downright Lovecraftian in the redundant adjective department. by Mischief Maker 02/23/2012, 1:26pm PST NEW
 
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