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by veronica 08/20/2003, 6:44pm PDT |
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Senor Barborito wrote:
If the people at that convention had followed these simple rules not only would I be happier not having to look at/smell the most horribly deformed and putrid 'people' I have ever interacted with - and this includes the street bums I used to serve meals to at the mission as a kid - but most of you could probably also score a girlfriend of some kind, which clearly none of you ever have.
This jumped out at me: in the above paragraph, you started with "the people" and ended with "you" as your focus. You need to be clear on who you are talking to.
v
Yes, I told him IRL, but this is a reminder.
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