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by Ray of Light 07/24/2008, 11:41am PDT |
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Goodbye ink-and-paper friends! ^_^
Chaps,
I am mightily pissed off.
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Owen, we discussed your turning three of my long sentences into six short ones in a single piece, and how that wasn't going to happen anymore, so I'm really hoping it wasn't you that fucked up my review on saturday.
It was the final sentence. Final sentences are very, very important. A piece builds to them, they are the little jingle that the reader takes with him into the weekend.
I wrote: "I can't think of a nicer place to sit this spring over a glass of rosé and watch the boys and girls in the street outside smiling gaily to each other, and wondering where to go for a nosh."
"I like to drink out-of-doors and cock a brow. Don't think me creepy."
I won't give away how they butchered his beautiful ricepaper sentence. See for yourself! |
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